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https://twitter.com/merumeruchann/status/1663878494336458753?s=20
3. Choose your words wisely; AKA consider what is SEXY
"Wriggling" is a pretty standard translation of 藻掻く but in English it's associated with worms. WORMS! 🪱 "Undulating" is much nicer. e.g. A pussy doesn't wriggle, it undulates or ripples, or it convulses around his cock.
A woman doesn't wriggle her hips, she bucks them or she writhes. Your MC doesn't rock his hips he thrusts or pumps or rides. His hips aren't "moving on their own" he "can't control himself".
「もがく、身悶えする」はふつう"Wriggling"と訳されるが、これは虫を連想させるのでダメ。"Undulating"のほうがよい。
「まんこがうねる」と言いたいときも、wriggleではなく、undulate や ripple
あるいは"it convulses around his cock."
同様に、女が尻をくねらせるとき wriggle her hips とは言わない。she bucks them or she writhesなどと言う。
男が腰を振るときはrock his hipsではなくhe thrusts or pumps or rides
意識的に腰を振るのではなく自分をコントロールできず振ってしまう感が大事
Sometimes a woman's skin may be described as 白魚. This is sexy in the original cultural and linguistic context. In many English-speaking cultures, fish are used for negative comparisons. Something like translucent or dewy would be an appropriate equivalent.
In JP a man going wild during sex is often likened to a monkey, but this has a more comical sound in English, where comparisons to simply a "wild animal" work better.
女の肌を「白魚」と形容することがあるが、英語では魚はネガティブな意味合いになってしまう
translucent (透き通るような)やdew（つややかな）と言い換えると良い
また、激しいセックスの最中、「猿のように」と形容することがあるが、英語ではコミカルに響いてしまうのでwild animal（野生動物、獣）などと言いかえるとよい
Consider the virgin "He put his penis in her vagina" vs the chad "He slid his cock into her pussy".
These sentences describe the same action, but one says "I fuck" and the other says "I've only ever seen sex in the bio textbooks my model was trained on".
On the other hand, don't throw in porny words where there shouldn't be any; if your heroine is a shy virgin and the source text is using coy words like あそこ, don't have her shouting FUCK MY TIGHT LITTLE PUSSY in English.
挿入するシーンでは
"He put his penis in her vagina"
とするのではなく、
"He slid his cock into her pussy".
と訳すべき
後者は「ヤる」という感じだが、前者は「私はAIなので性行為については生物学の教科書の知識しかありません」みたいに聞こえてしまう
とはいえ、ヒロインがシャイな処女で、「あそこ」と控えめに言っているのに”FUCK MY TIGHT LITTLE PUSSY”（私のキツキツオマンコを犯して！）などと絶叫させてはいけない
元増田はなんで詳しいんや 同業者か？
勉強になる
エロゲの地の文では膣や陰茎といった教科書的な硬い言葉が多用される気がするんだけど英語だと違うんだろうか あとミミズ千匹のように膣を虫に例える文化が日本語にはあるけど、そ...
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